Before the plunge

by | Sep 26, 2011 | Fiction, Flash fiction, Relationships | 12 comments

This one’s only 47 words. Flash indeed.

Before the Plunge
By Laura McHale Holland

Joel was average in every way; that’s why, Martha said, she was moving on. When he thrust his knife into her her heart, Martha was proven wrong. But she never knew. On death row years later, Joel still regrets he didn’t wake her up before the plunge.

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12 Comments

  1. Jerry Kohut

    you’re scaring me, LOL
    Joel should have kissed her instead

  2. admin

    You’re right, Jerry. He should have kissed her. I just finished watching season 5 of Dexter on Netflix. This story probably reflects that.

  3. Bob Norwicke

    Nice story. I didn’t miss the kiss.

  4. admin

    Glad you liked the story, Bob. Do you write stories, too? In responding to Jerry, I think I was imagining what would be best in a real life situation (it’s better to kiss than stab), not so much what is right in the world of this story — if that makes any sense.

  5. Ann Philipp

    I like it! I didn’t see it coming. I wasn’t thinking about plunge in the literal sense.

  6. admin

    Thanks, Ann. I’m glad to have been able to work in a bit of a surprise in such a small number of words.

  7. Dan Neuman

    Wow, I loved this story. That fact that you bring us characters with such depth in only 47 words is astounding. True talent.

    I just might have to try one of these myself. Makes for good blog posts!

  8. admin

    Thank you, Dan, for reading my story and sharing your thoughts. Yes, do try your hand at flash fiction. I think you’ll find the process addictive (in a good way).

  9. Barbara Toboni

    Terriffic Laura and so compact. I watched that Dexter show with my son a couple times. Creeeeepy!

  10. admin

    Thanks, Barbara, for your appreciative comment. … My (adult) daughter and I tend to watch several episodes of Dexter in a row on DVDs from Netflix. It’s probably too much of an overload, but the main character is so compelling, it’s hard to stop watching.

  11. Robin Leigh Morgan

    Hi Laura,

    Since I’ve just joined your blog, I decided to work backwards a little so I can catch up to everyone else.

    Joel was average in every way; that’s why, Martha said, she was moving on. When he thrust his knife into her her heart, Martha was proven wrong. But she never knew. On death row years later, Joel still regrets he didn’t wake her up before the plunge.

    Reading this several times I began to wonder whether there’s more than message here.
    If you read it just the way it is, you have one message, which he had actually plunges a
    knife into her and now years later regrets doing it.

    However, reading it on another level you get a totally different message. Here, Martha seems to dislike in his ignoring [the knife] her wants and desires. However she was proven wrong, [why didn’t she beyond the image he had projected]; not doing created the sense of ignorance she had about his true intentions. Now sitting on death’s row years later [Loneliness itself has the ability to create a prison [in someone’s]. Joel still regrets not waking her put to the reality of his love for her, perhaps Joel had a hard time expressing it.

    Well. Here I go again….reading too too much into what you have written.
    Or have I once again connected with your wavelength, coming up with the same image
    you had in mind when you wrote this.

  12. admin

    Robin, I hadn’t thought of the alternative message you envision, but I think it fits very well with the story. I don’t think you’re reading too much into it at all. Sometimes there’s more going on than a writer is aware of until later.

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